Peer Comment

Henry: descriptive essay

I really enjoyed reading your essay, even though it did not have complicated words, you were still able to paint a clear scene with your description. I also really liked your casual writing style, as it makes your unique style and voice to it.

Alden’s credo presentation:

I really enjoyed reading your credo and thought it was an excellent idea to talk about your struggle at first and the passion you have now. I really liked the video you incorporated but I still couldn’t tell who you were in the video

Samuel’s book review:

Hi, Samuel. I thought that this novel review was quite useful and informative. Through reading this review, i was able to understand the over arching style and theme, while leaving me curious with what happens in the book. Even though this was not your cup of tea, I’m glad you did a book review on it because I’m quite interested in this book now.

Thomas’s act writing:

While I liked reading this essay, I found that the essay was lazily put together. Most of the essay of was directly pasted from the prompt( the thesis and the perspectives), which left little space for your own perspective. Instead you should simplify the thesis to less words and add more to what you think. I also agree with your perspective: machines have both positive and negative effects. That being said, I thought the perspective was poorly backed up and definitely needed some evidence. For example, you could talk about a technology with both positive and negative effects.